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Breathe out
So I can take it in
Breathe out
I'll take you in
Breathe out
Lost in you
My hands are bleached
Cracked and dried
Open sours pour into you
Feeding on the waste
Of what could not heal
Pure of mind heart soul
Let me taste you once more
Breathe in
Blessed in your eyes
Breathe in
I've lost control
Breathe in
Whole in you
The Clouds parted now
Hot and dried
The rain pours over me
Sucking down the waste
Of what should heal me
Rot in soul mind heart
Breathe with me once more
Fight for me
Die for me
We'll see the end together
Just breathe with me so I can heal.
Breathe. Breathe. Breathe. Breathe.
©2002-2010 ~annonmythra
:iconannonmythra:

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I'm not sure about this one. The woman likes it tho.

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:iconwillowheart:
wow.. I absolutely love that. nice flow and rhythm. I really like the change of tone as the poem moves on... the beginning sounding fairly depressed, moving to a sort of need, and finally ending with a bliss of some sort. or at least that's the way it seemed to me ;) (Wink) gotta go see some of your other work now. welcome to my DeviantWatch
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Swirling round with this familiar parable.
Spinning, weaving round each new experience.
Recognize this as a holy gift and celebrate this
chance to be alive and breathing
::Tool:: Parabola
:iconmortalpsyche:
Sounds very lyrical, I like it... Although I'm not sure about the last line, I think it would work better with just a single word
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-The only thing that is yours, is your soul;
everything else is borrowed.

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